Ball of power
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You get an invite in the mail, and when you read it you are caught off guard, it was an invitation to a ball! But it seemed a little suspicious, especially with how they called it the "ball of power", they said that only strong warriors would be invited, but why was the big question? You realize you only have three days before the ball, you get the clothes you feel will fit best with a ball and go to the specified location on the third day, it was a large mansion, mainly covered with black paint but it had sliver trim, and the door was sliver with a golden doorknob, someone waited at the door, when you approached they spoke to you by name and finished their sentence saying "the master has been expecting you" they bowed lightly as they opened the door, you would soon find that you are not the only one there, as there were a few others, one girl with blonde hair put up in a bun and dark eyes wearing a long blue gown, a boy with black hair and teal eyes wearing a suit, a boy with dirty brown hair and sweet eyes wearing a suit as well, and one other boy, he had white hair falling over his left eye, and his eyes were gray, he wore a suit like the other two boys, they seem to be friends with one another, they turn and look back at you,
"I was starting to worry that we were the only ones invited" the boy with dirty blonde hair chuckled
A red-haired little girl was walking through the mall with what appeared to be her siblings, both teenagers
Little Girl: "Thanks so much for offering to take us to my mall, papa!"
The adolescent male of the trio piques up, questioning the attitude of the one who claimed to be his daughter
Teen Male: "Huh? But, you practically begged me to go."
Little Girl: "Does it really matter who begged who? Anyways, I have to go to the bathroom now, bye!"
The girl runs off towards the ladies room and stands in front of the mirror, boasting to herself
Little Girl: "Muahahaha! Taking both my parents to the mall like this is genius, they'll birth me here for sure! And to think, I got this idea all from a weird letter."
She glances over the invite to the ball, going to throw it in the trash before noticing a blue-haired little girl in red clothing exit a stall, her own clothes being yellow
Yellow-clothed Girl: "Oh no."
(Guess that's before the ball?)
(Things typically happen in the order they're posted)
If i can offer a piece of advice, i'd say you should make paragraphs.
For that i mean to distance pieces of your posts between description and dialogue.
It makes it easier for people to read and also makes your RP seem a bit more professional. (for descriptions you could also use Italics but first you should focus on spacing.)
(Okay, thank you and so you aren't going to the ball Kiiro?)
Actually, i could go a bit more in detail if you want...either here or in general in PMs since it could help others too.
(It's not the destination, but the journey)
(That's alright, Astro, you can say your other points if you like but I find the small explanation very helpful! And Kiiro the ball is the main point of the story, and the start of the journey, you can't really start the quest without going to the ball)
Ok, here i go!
I hope it doesn't seem like too much to take in ha ha
•Formatting and structure
Your posts lack any sort of spacing which with longer ones makes them confusing and look like a wall.
Which in term makes people unable to read them.
-You can improve by spacing of course, there are many examples on the phansite and looking at them will help get a feel of how "standard"? RP works in here.
•Keep in mind other players
In a fight or any other interaction you should keep in mind everyone else and react correctly based on yours and their power level, (as an example if a normal person were to fight superman and he threw a punch at them the normal average human would npt be able to dodge it, or in a very lucky scenario would but only if certain circumstances are met) the context, place etc etc...
-Look really close at those other posts, reread them if you gotta and take your time in replying if you need it.
Lastly a suggestion
You seem to be new to this so atleast for starting off i'd suggest to use your account to control one character at a time.
Having only one increases the possibility of development and makes it easier to keep track of their actions. (Fyi i would not be able to handle more than 2 myself without messing things up).
If you have any more questions i could help if you want, just contact me on the PMs or discord.
Otherwise we also have a server for the Phansite where there is a channel dedicated to RP with more people than me.
I hope this clear enough.
(Thank you very much, Astro, and I think I can keep up with my characters, I used to roleplay on amino with probably closer to a hundred characters)
OOC: If I may, just because you can keep up with one account using 100 alts doesn't mean everyone else can. Alts exist for the sake of transparency. I don't RP as Sam when using my Gin account, or at least not if Gin isn't present. If he is, I label who's talking like:
With the unlabled sentances being who the account is (Gin) and the labelled ones, obviously, being the person who isn't named by the account. Alts exist for the sake of clarity. Not many people enjoy having to scry through a wall of text for all the people who are supposed to be a part of one persons actions, especially since you tend to use like three or more characters with a single account at times.
Or at least that's how I see it. I'm sure someone can explain it better
(I slightly understand, but I have a bad memory, not enough time to switch from account to account and roleplay like I want to, very little patience, and a hot head)
Hmmm like i said before i would suggest using less than tjat number (atleast while starting, since you enjoy GMing more than one) so that you can develop them to the fullest.
Even visual rappresentation can help, if you plan to use multiple characters maybe picking a picture for them can make things less confusing.
This is me smiling and you can describe anything else you might want
(Pic of the second character)
And so on...
I've seen a couple of sites that can help with making good looking characters incase you need something quick.
Like this one https://picrew.me/
Red-clothed girl: "You are foolish, Yellow Person. You can't honestly expect papa to love your mama anymore than he does mine."
Yellow Person: "Hiiro-chan! What are you doing here!? Ypu're totally gonna mess up my plan for world domination!"
Hiiro: "...You mean your plan to get papa to fall in love with your mama?"
Yellow Person: "Ah, yes, I must've gotten this series confused with a different one. Hmpf."
The little girl pouts and runs out of the bathroom, Hiiro following her close behind. They run back to the adolescent male, finding that a more mature woman had joined them. The girl with yellow clothes runs up and hugs the teen male
Teen Male: "Kiiro? You shouldn't run off like that, you could get hurt."
Kiiro: "I'm sorry, papa, I'll make sure to have you take me next time!"
The teenage girl looks at the male one and points at something
Teen girl: "Hey, Saku, look at that!"
The three older people look at the thing, giving the kids time to discuss privately
Hiiro: "So, what's your plan?"
Hiiro: "You know, what dastardy trick did you have? You were gonna bring them to the mall, and then what?"
Kiiro: "Ah, yes, I was gonna use my, um, hormone spray! It'll amplify the feelings papa has for mama!"
Hiiro: "Won't that just-"
Hiiro was interrupted by Kiiro pulling out a can and accidentally dropping it. Contrary to what she expected it do, it just summoned a giant octopus monster instead.
Kiiro/Hiiro: "Oh no."
The monster starts attacking people in the mall, predominantly women, and breaking through various stores and sections.
(Okay, how do I put the picture in the post though? And you will be going to the ball soon, right Kiiro?)
(We'll cross that bridge when we get to it.)
you can just copy and paste the link, if you saved it, just upload it on something like imgur and then get the link
Another day of sleeping in a cheap motel until the next job for our good ol' alternative universe Morgana. His yellow eyes just staring at the TV... Until he gets a letter to some sort of "ball of power". Sounds interesting... But then again, he really isn't a strong warrior at this point. As if he was a warrior at all. Just a mercenary attempting to find the love of his life again. He takes out a photo and rubs it.
"I'll reunite with you sooner or later... My sacred lotus."
He decides to throw on a suit and head over, of course he's taking his weapons... And his special cane. But don't tell anyone that.
(Also, two of those characters actually look like they do in canon, the boy with dirty blonde hair is Goro Akechi, and the girl with her hair in a bun is Annie Leonhart from attack on titan,)
Upon realising who he was greeting, Goro looked away, trying to hide that it was him to the best of his ability, the boy with white hair started to smile, intrigued by the cat, as he had never seen one quite like Morgana in his world and never saw one up close in this one
"Why hello, precious creature" he said in a perky voice
Annie rolled her eyes, murmuring something under her breath, the boy with green eyes glared at her for a moment as he messes around with his left sleeve, revealing that he had a birthmark on his arm, it looked like part of a dragon, Goro started to glance at Morgana, then looked away again,
The Octopus monster breaks through the entrance of a ball, wrapping a tentacle around Morgana and destroying their clothes
Kiiro: "Uh, any ideas, Hiiro-chan?"
Hiiro speaks in a monotone voice
Hiiro: "I sigh, Yellow Person."
Kiiro: "Don't act like that, it was an accident!"
Hiiro: "I am well aware of that fact. We should store the Octopus Person in a pocket dimension to stop it from hurting anyone."
Kiiro: "Great idea! I'll order one at the future department store!"
Kiiro scrolls through her FuturePad, screaming upon reaching the Pocket Dimension's store page
Kiiro: "I can't possibly afford that in time!"
Hiiro: "Fine, I will allow you to borrow some money from my account."
Kiiro: "Woah, are you sure? That'd be a real lifesaver!"
Hiiro: "Of course, it's for the safety of the mall."
Kiiro: "Right, right. Now, one of us should probably distract it in order to get it into the pocket space."
Hiiro: "Ah, how brave of you to volunteer, Yellow Person."
Kiiro: "Wait, I wasn't-"
Kiiro was interrupted by being pushed into the sight of the monster
(The ball isn't near the mall...)
(Oh, you didn't say it was in the mall? Well, to be fair I barely payed attention to the op. Let's just ignore the ball entirely then.)
(No, since the ball is the point of this roleplay, whatever you're doing is irreverent, didn't I ban shitposting on this roleplay? Oh yes I did, so get with the plot, or get out,)
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
"Oh. Guess I'll die."
"Mona" disappears. He's seen enough hentai to know where this is going.
(Morgana, don't worry about them, they are clashing with the plot, pretend the octopus never came into play, you and I are the only ones going with the plot)
Niko appears... Through a normal door this time.
"I have fulfilled my purpose."
(Niko, no shitposting, if Akechi is supposed to be present in this roleplay, he's present, you can't change that no matter how many times you appear and kill him, because each time it won't count, as its a shitpost)
it's not a shitpost, you just don't know how to write a fight
(Akechi will fight, but until you put something that I don't count as a shitpost, it won't be counted)
The bullet misses. Huh. Well then, this'll be fun.
"Goro Akechi, you have committed the crime of persisting after death. You shall be met with swift execution."
He takes out a compendium.
"You have a choice. Come with me, and I shall make your death painless. The guillotine is an efficient and quick death. If you attempt to fight back, then pain unending awaits."
(Nope, plus unless you are Lavenza, Caroline, Justine, Margaret, Theodore or the one I suspect is a velvet room attendant you aren't one, and unless one of the actual velvet room attendants or Akira appears the velvet room isn't even going to be mentioned)
(Then unless you're Joker you can't talk to Arsene?)
(I may write human Arsene in, as he is a known character I use, now if you two would like I can rewrite you both into the story, keep in mind that your characters may be not how you like them but it will allow you to roleplay with a better idea of what I will allow, Niko, I can write for you, the beginning of a fight with Akechi, where you wield a gun, but you won't be a velvet room attendant if you want your normal character, to have your moves actually effect the story you can't be one, the best you can be is a wildcard)
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
(Well, if you're Goro Akechi, you shoudn't still be alive until Persona 5 Royal comes out. Also, rewriting other's characters? Are you actually serious?)
(edited by InterNiko)
(There are three villains that died in their series and got brought back somehow, and you only complain about one? And that offer was to help get you in and counted as an actual character, instead of each post being something to be ignored until you got to my standards)
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
(I don't want Cait to completely hate me so at the least i'll rewrite my thing so it works with yours. I'll just make it so that everything happened in an outside mall and the octopus ran a fair enough distance to crash into the mansion, okay?)
(Can you write the octopus out and just come to the ball? There will be plenty chaos without it)
(So, what I gather is that you negate shitposts, but if things don't really go how you like, you negate them as well? I see.)
(And what I see as a shitpost will not be counted, Kiiro is trying to work with me, can't you?)
(So, anything you deem is a shitpost will be negated, even if the person isn't shitposting, just trying to have a little less serious fun with the plot? I see.)
(Well, i'd rather not. It's part of what I myself wrote up and I wouldn't feel good about having to change the actual interaction. Could you not just think of a clever way to deal with it in canon?)
Oh... This degenerated quite a bit, i'm sad things went this way in the end...
I have to say, some of the points you brought in do not make sense Twilight.... To lead a RP thread here you gotta give freedom to the other players, control and godmodding are not really well seen here.
(Can it not grab Morgana then? And fine, Niko, but the battle between the you and Goro will wait until after the octopus is dealt with,)
Caught off guard by both sudden appearances, Goro gets his sword ready, as does Annie and the other two,
"Alright, looks like we got a fight on our hands already! Lets show them the strength of the night!" The one with teal eyes yelled
"Well, quite the turn of events, let's go" the one with white hair said
Kiiro screeches as she runs into the further recesses of the ball, away from the monster
Kiiro: "Hiiro-chan, help me!"
Hiiro: "No, I don't think I will."
Kiiro: "Wha? But, you said-!"
Hiiro: "I was teasing you, Yellow Person. In order to fully capture the monster you need to wear away at his life essence. I'll prepare the Pocket Dimension in the meantime."
"Star struck!" The boy with green eyes called
Small star shaped projectiles start flying swiftly at the octopus, followed by the green eyed boy launching and throwing a large star shaped projectile down at it, he landed with grace beside Kiiro, the boy with white hair swiftly started slicing at the octopus with his black sword, followed by Annie launching up above the octopus and slamming her sword down into it, Goro then shot at the octopus several times,
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
*On a seat in the corner, sits Jaguar Warrior, sipping a drink that they got while hanging around in the ball.*
Welp, the monsters dead everybody. Good job. Let's all go home nyow.
The star-shaped projectiles merely graze the creature, while the sword cuts sever its limbs and pierce its head. The bullets, of course, strike straight through the chest of the monster. It falls to the ground, shrieking in agony. Kiiro backs away from the green eyed boy
Kiiro: "Woah, stranger danger!"
Hiiro: "That's way too extreme for this series, but the situation has been handled. Come, Yellow Person, let us return to papa and inform him of these developments."
Kiiro then hastefully returns to Hiiro's side, matching her pace as the duo walk towards the rest of the group
Kiiro: "Ah, but, what about the Pocket Dimension? We spent so much money on it and all."
Hiiro: "...I have an idea for something we can do in there."
"Sorry, we went a little... overkill..." the green eyed boy said
"Allow us to introduce ourselves, I am Ghirahim, my companions are Goro Akechi, Annie Leonhart, and Leon Sevar, it's a pleasure to meet you two" the white haired boy chimed
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
Nyarrators notes: For those who aren't fucking weebs, Ghirahim is the evil demon lord and a sword from Zelda: Skyward Sword and Annie Leonhart is one of those spider people Titan hunters And a Titan Shifter AKA Villainfrom Attack on Titan. Leon Saver is an OC, at least to my research/ Google search. Now back to your regular scheduled thread
*Jaguar Warrior slurps their drink.*
So, how is everyone's day?
(You're not the narrator... and it's Leon Sevar not Leon Saver,)
(edited by MaskedTwilight)
Your right. I'm the Nyarattor. It's like a narrator but more Jaguar. As my bestie, you should have no problems with this, right? Nyah.
(And I just realized that I kept saying the wrong eye color...)
Nyamazing! You're welcome for the help, nyah.
Nyo need to thank me. Your such a Tsundere you'd never even admit that I'm your bestie, but I know your thankful. So nyour welcome.
(edited by Jaguar_Warrior)
(I realized that I put the wrong eye color because I was making sure I didn't leave any characters out and noticed that I messed up every time I said green eyes because Leon's eyes are teal)
Nyand I'm happy to make you realise that, Nyah.
(No, it was me making sure I didn't leave any characters out, it was more Kiiro that made me look)
Fyi Akechi does not have dirty blonde hair, it's weird using that color for him.
OOC: I mean leave em out, bring ‘em in, most people wouldn’t notice. I know I didn’t
Nyo, you don't have too thank me. I nyow you aren't the type to do so. Go back to your RP with your 4 characters tied to one account for nyo reason.
*Jaguar Warrior points finger guns at Twilight.
See Nyou around, cool cat.
(I don't know what his hair color would actually be called, and it's kinda close to dirty blonde so I went with that... makes sense, right?)
OOC: Brown. People call it brown. It’s a normal hair color
It's literally just brown, some time it fluctuates to light or reddish brown depending on the setting...
OOC: Akechi's hair colour is brown. It looks nothing like a dirty blond. You shouldn't RP character if you don't even know what he looks like
(Didn't seem quite brown to me, but okay)
The doors are suddenly thrown open (This is the theme https://youtu.be/23m3p55NA48) and a mysterious boy walks in, he wears all black and has black hair, his head hangs low and he walks right past everyone else, he wears a hooded cloak, with the hood up, the black hair only beibg barely visible, he doesn't bother to look up, Annie, Goro, Leon and Ghirahim clear out of his way, there was an eerie feeling around him, extremely cold, anyone who stood near him would get a chill,
OOC: The Youtube link doesn't work. Not being critical this time, just thought you should know.
They literally say this in his wiki...
(Huh... just got it... https://youtu.be/23m3p55NA48 what about this one?)
(Great! And also, just to let you guys know, according to my sister dirty blonde is light brown)
OOC: While your sis is mostly correct (according to google it's slightly different. Light brown has less blond in it than Dark/ Dirty Blond) but Akechi has plain brown hair (I'd say it's closer to dark brown than light but I'm no hair dresser so I don't need to know this) which is darker than light brown and so it's hard to mistake the two as the same.
(edited by Fayth)
(It looked light brown to me... well, I ain't the smartest person in the world, shall we continue?)
OOC: Same, but yeah. Continuing probably for the best. Don't let me stop you.
(Would you like to join? Everyone else seems to have gone silent...)
OOC: Nah, sorry. I've only got about ten more minutes before I gotta go out with family.