The Black Blood runs
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She was all over the news, words of her splattered in every magazine like blood on a carpet, anywhere from one page to the entire thing, teachers spoke about her, students spoke about her, everlyone spoke about her, she was legendary then, the mercenary Black Blood, she had started to become more of a hit than even the phantom thieves of hearts, though when A calling card appeared near when Black Blood appeared it was even more of a hit
I slit blak blood's throat and take their power.
(Black Blood hasn't appeared in the roleplay yet, and her identity hasn't been confirmed, you may suspect it but can't be sure until I confirm her identity, and since she isn't out doing mercenary stuff you can't kill her, plus she doesn't have any powers, she might have a persona later on, haven't decided, but that's a might)
Is this an RP, if so why is it tagged as talk?
obviously this is a serious discussion
I’ve gotta say it’s not a bad opening paragraph, just maybe a bit on the edge side with the black blood. But just a little bit, it’s not going so edgy it’s satire or even quite far enough to be cool, just an awkward middle ground.
Goodies though, you gave me a totally KILLER idea for a band name, so kudos!
I defeet lightwarden and sav dakNES frum lend
(Yeah about the it being tagged talk... I was kinda half asleep and missed the roleplay button and didn't fully register until after I posted it... and there isn't an option to change it to the right one... and I am glad to have helped you with that, Tot_Pot! And um... who's Twilight?)
Asana draws out a comic in her notebook about the mysterious mercenary, she gave her blood red hair as she was described to have such, she wore a black outfit that had gray splatter patterns all over it, and her mask was blood red, she looked down upon the one she was facing up against
"I have been hired... to be your demise" she said in the comic
[i]Asana smiles, very much amused by the comic she was making, though she was in the middle of class with the teacher rambling on and on, they didn't seem to like Black Blood, and were mad about her existence, Asana was tuning them out
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This is a really good paragraph, but it's totally not kid friendly man. So let's Kidz Bop-ify that so that anyone can enjoy this opening sentence that you epically made with your own wicked mind!
She was all over news, words of her splattered in every magazine like apple juice on a carpet, anywhere from one page to the entire thing, teachers spoke about her, students spoke about her, everlyone spoke about her, she was legendary then, the epic game ender Black Liquid, she had started to become more of a hit than even the phantom stealers of hearts, though when A calling card appeared near when Black Liquid appeared it was even more of a hit
That was very dark of you to do... so I will aid in that as well
Asana draws out a comic in her notebook about the mysterious freelancer, she gave her ketchup red hair as she was described to have such, she wore a black outfit that had gray sprinkle patterns all over it, and her mask was ketchup red, she looked down upon the one she was facing towards
"I have been hired... to mow your lawn" she said in the comic
[i]Asana smiles, very much amused by the comic she was making, though she was in the middle of class with the teacher rambling on and on, they weren't mates with Black Liquid, and were grumpy about her, Asana was listening to music
Those who had seen the mysterious mercenary and then saw the student would think that it was their second encounter, she always wears dark colors, just like Black Blood, and her hair was also blood red, however, she was a Shujin student, not just a student of any school, she couldn't be a legendary mercenary... could she?
The Kidz Bop Kids were on tour today, and were visiting Japan even though they probably wouldn't know any Japanese in the first place. God forbid knows how Shujin let them in. They were in the hallway when they saw the totally not kid friendly girl.
Alana: "Oh, hi."
Isiah: "Woah, it couldn't be."
Jacob: "Couldn't be what?"
Juliana: "Who else but the mysterious freelancer? Black Liquid!"
Layla: "Wait, who?"
Liv: "I have no idea girl."
Stephen (shouts at the top of his lungs): "We're the Kidz Bop Kids!"
This would annoy the teacher and he would start telling at the kids as Asana stays in her own little world, not paying mind to her surroundings, so it seemed, if one were paying close attention, when she heard the yells she changed how she held the pencil she was using right then, to a position that, with enough speed and strength she could stab an enemy with it although it were a knife, the pencil was fairly sharp, she sharpens it every day, keeping it very pointed, and now, if you notice this small thing, it would become clear why all of her pencils were like this, she sharpened them into weapons, which raises the question yet again... could a student of Shujin academy be a mercenary?
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They all look at the teacher, and then at each other. Then they laugh. It was like they did nothing wrong...because they're the Kidz Bop Kids.
Alana: "Hi teach. Gotta bounce."
Isiah: "You heard her. Bye."
Jacob: "Take this L (no offense)."
Juliana: "Guys, I'm telling you, it's the Mysterious Freelancer, Black Liquid!"
Layla: "Uh, who?"
Liv: "What? Girl, speak up. Tell the press about this."
Stephen (shouts at the top of his lungs): "WE'RE THE KIDZ BOP KIDS!"
They left afterwards. No explanation needed.
Warrior Of Darkness sits in the desk next to the freelancer Asana, their clothes glamoured into schoolgirl clothes. Their rapier was made into a long rapier-shaped pencil and their magic crystal was made into a floating noteback. They point their rapier at Asana, their magic crystal floating in their left hand.
"I'm going to defeat this A rank hunt for EXP and nuts"
Asana paid them no mind, but a necklace would become a little more visible as she changed position and continued with her comic,
11 more warriors showed up, some using arcane magic and others big swords and heavy armor. They all rushed at Asana at once. The one with rapier-shaped pencil thrusted the pencil at Asana, which somehow hurt just as much as a rapier. A bunch of explosive attacks of different elements all fire off at Asana at once.
Asana ducked underneath her desk, taking her comic with her
"What is your problem?!" She shouted
She walks away, having somehow dodged most attacks, the pencil was only stuck in her upper arm and some magic hit her, but not enough to disable her or kill her,
"Psychos..." she said
One of the big sword guys smash the desk with their sword. 5 more warrior guys show up, one with a magic book and fire dragon thingy. The fire dragon thingy gets behind Asana and startd breathing firey stuff on Asana. Also a bunch of magic swords fly at Asana.
Asana shuts the door behind her, blocking the attacks, as she had already left the desk when the one with the big sword attacked it, she rolled her eyes, she disappeared out of the school and couldn't be found...
Realizing their prey had gotten away, the warriors of darkness look for her. Thinking she might still be in the school, they just blow up the entire school with various explosives and magic and hope she gets caught in the rubble.
Black Blood stares down from the treetops, the mercenary sighs,
"Fools" she said in a hushed tone
Being unable to sense their prey in the rubble, the warriors of darkness widen their search and start destroying everyone outside school grounds as well. In the streets of cities like shibuya or shinjuku, stores and roads where smashed and burned. Entire skyscrapers collapsed at the might of these warriors. They then kill everyone in the tv station and make a broadcast to the entire world.
"If anyone spots this hunt."
They display a picture of Asana which one of them took earlier
"Report their location to us at once. Only then will we end our rampage."
Any citizen, soldier or police that tried to stop them would be killed instantly.
An anonymous message saying where you could find Asana came in, saying she was wandering the streets in hopes for shelter from the chaos, there is even a tracker giving precise location, she was clearly on her way to a cafe, in hopes of finding that the place was still okay and it being a place of which she could rest
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An ICBM is sent to her location
Somehow, the ICBM was interrupted...
It to, was interrupted, after that, a bird came with a massage,
"If you are going to try to kill me, come and face me when you do" the message said
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A billion ICBMS were all sent at once
"This site is cancer."
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(Okay, thought that would play out into a fight, but I will say that all of that stuff with the fighters and magic happened in a different comic that Asana made)
Asana Looks over one of her older comics,
"This one is a bit crazy..." she said
She put it away and keeps drawing at the one she currently was drawing up, the teacher didn't even realize that she wasn't paying attention,
(Hey, i'm Mona and that wod guy was my alt. I'd like to clarify that I was just trolling but i'm genuinely impressed with the way you handled it and would like to officially welcome you to the sight. Do you use discord? Because a majority of ooc discussion for rp happens on the site's own discord. I'd recommend joining it if you wanna be part of the more serious rp here.)
This is a really good paragraph, but it's totally not kid friendly man. So let's Kidz Bop-ify that so that anyone can enjoy this opening sentence that you epically made with your own wicked mind![/i]
Thank you Kidz Bop, very cool
(Wow Flareon! Thank you very much! And I ain't a discord user, I tried it and it isn't my thing)
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N-Nyour sure you're not Twilight, right?
(Heh... you know me well though we clash... indeed Jaguar, I am Twilight)
Okay but if you're gonna use a dozen alts with characters no one knows at least use a consistent personality.
(That... was a sudden change... do you not like me or something, Flareon?)
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(Gleamstar has several very different alts, no one gets upset with them, you snapped upon hearing that I am Twilight, so if it's not that you don't like me what it is?)
I just said I don't like you
(Oh, read that wrong, sure felt like you didn't like me, should have expected that, least some people like me, (some a little too much) but well... I don't really see you as a friend anyways, since you don't like me, go talk to someone you do like, goodbye)
the people that like you are Archer. Nuff said
(If you don't like someone don't talk to them, I have to talk to you to get this point through your head, because you are wasting both of our time, also, Jaguar, would you like to continue with me?)
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I could say the same about you. Besides, I would never do something so bigoted as to not talk to someone because I don't like them. As a welcoming and tolerant individual I accept one's difference and am willing to take the first step in starting conflicts.
(Go find someone who wants to talk to you, I know they are rare but I certainly ain't one of them, like you yourself said I handled you pretty well earlier, and yeah, you are good at starting conflicts)
(There you are Jaguar, would you like to roleplay? I would rather someone cute than someone... like Flareon,)
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You seem like you're more fond of playing with yourself, though
(Maybe controlling myself isn't the best idea... leave me alone and find someone who gives a damn about your opinion, okay? Because I sure as hell don't! I don't like you, and I bet you only have that warrior of darkness alt so you could pretend to have a friend! Makes sense that would be the only way, who would want to hang out with you? You're nothing but a bitchy shitposter with a bad attitude and no brain, find somewhere you are wanted, because that isn't here!)
You know you should be careful about what you say to others
Keep the language down.
The site's rules clearly state that you should be respectful.
Insulting others like this will just get you banned.
(Mona should not be here to begin with so that's a different story, but if i had to choose i'd tolerate him more than you.)
You come off as standoffish, arrogant and entitled to us liking your way of doing this.
Long story short; we don't.
If you want us to actually accept you in this community you either change and accomodate or stop roleplaying entirely.
Stop calling "shitposters" whoever you don't agree with.
Because in the end you reap what you sow.
Ouch. Levi coming in with the harsh truths
And if I may offer my stance on this, you clearly don’t know how to handle certain people on the internet. Insulting them or giving them more attention only makes things worse. Granted, I’m not saying that Mona’s in the right, but you shouldn’t just snap and insult people, ya dig? I did that once and I still regret it, but that’s another story.
The Phansite’s a bit rough for someone like you, so I suggest a few options:
1. You adapt, although that’s a longer process.
2. Don’t snap. If you feel that someone’s directly insulting you, just take a step back and contact a mod.
3. Return to Amino. That community’s probably best for you.
If you need to talk, just hit me up.)
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(Sorry, just when people say they don't like me and they don't leave me alone, I get pretty mad, I told them goodbye and they didn't leave, and if you ask me, if you don't like someone, you don't mess with that someone, and Flareon kept messing with me, I tried to get them to leave after they said they didn't like me and they wouldn't, and you see... I have an extreme temper, also, I am trying to adapt, I mean, haven't I gotten better for at least acknowledging them and not throwing all that out just making it to where Asana was reading one of her older comics? And I don't try to be arrogant, dont actually think I am... standoffish fits, that one is on purpose kinda, and I didn't think I seemed entitled... I was inviting someone I don't really get along with to join me when I could have just tracked down Archer or one of my friends to roleplay,
On a different note, Levi, Cait-Sith, Jaguar, Eito, would you guys like to join me? It could really be helpful if you guys could help me out a little with being a better and funner Phansite roleplayer plus it would be fun!)
I mean, improvement is subjective. Technically, you can improve a broken watch by putting a bug in it to at least give the illusion it works. It's how conmen work. It doesn't make it any better, it just makes it look like it is better than it is. Just because you acknowlidge someone or started using alts doesn't mean your improving. It just means you've succeeded in doing a basic thing that everyone does.
And yes. You are arrogant. Hell, I'm arrogant and even I can see that your out doing me. So yeah, stop that. I'd appreciate it. Also, I get Mona's a prick most of the time to you, but that's no reason to just go off the rails at him.
Also, what's the point of inviting people to help you improve when all you do is ignore it when people give you advice to improve. No-ones going to take you up on that offer because you don't take anything on board.
Oh, and Archer won't be back until September due to only actually being here during school days.
(I've been trying to improve... and how am I arrogant?)
Well, you ain't doing a very good job of it. Sorry to be the one to break it to you.
And as for how your arrogant, have you read the things you've written? You telli people they can't do something and have to follow your script because you know what to do. You talk like you're entitled to something your not. When we try to help you, you go "but that's too much trouble for me" or " But I didn't have to do that on Amino" and shrug it off. Back to point A, if your trying your not doing it very well.
How many times have you seen someone on the site say " I give up trying to help you"? Or that "You're a lost cause"? Can I ask why you think that is?
No i don't think i'll join you, i tried way too much already.
Sorry but at this point it's just not worth any more of my time.
(Oh okay... see you later Captain)
"I reject your reality and substitute my own"
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(What is that supposed to mean?)
You ignored me. I asked you a question. I feel very hurt right now.
This is the only advice you'll be getting from me, so listen up. I get that it may seem like everybody else is ganging up on you or something like that, but they have a point. You've been given tons of advice by tons of people, and it doesn't seem like you followed it all that great. I'm not optimistic about my own chances, but here's what I wrote up:
1. Don't snap at others or start arguments. Mona's a bit of a prick, but that's no reason to not be respectful anyways. You only feed his bottomless appetite for shitposting and thus fail to help yourself at all.
1.5. If you don't like what others say and don't intend to answer seriously, just don't reply. Same thing with trolls.
2. Don't RP with yourself. If you want to do that, just go write a story. Additionally, you should probably restrict yourself to very few alts, or even better, just a single character that you can actually develop, instead of just using a giant, forgettable cast of characters.
2.5. No matter what you think, no, you cannot manage that many characters. At least not to the standards we set here. It may be different elsewhere, but on the Phansite, you'll only catch more shit.
2.75. It's not the alt accounts that are the issue, it's the alt characters. It's better that they are each in different accounts, true, but that does not alleviate the original issue that they're not great characters in and of themselves until you focus on them and build up their quality.
3. Spend some time looking at people RPing and take notes on how they structure their posts. Neater and better written posts make others take you more seriously.
3.5. Proofread before you post anything and ask yourself "Will this lead to others making fun of me?" If the answer is yes, change the post.
4. Your threads are mediocre at best. Restrict yourself to RP in other's threads, and once again, take notes and learn from that, before even thinking about starting your own threads again.
5. Pay attention when others give you advice instead of immediately jumping to defend yourself. If it was only one person constantly going after you, this situation would be different, but given the fact that the majority of the site is telling you to do stuff differently, it's obvious that something they're saying is accurate.
(Thank you very much, I will work to heed your advice! But one quick question that has practically nothing to do with this conversation...
Think you can reply to Shadow castle soon? Or are we dropping that one?
I meant "heed" not "need"... stupid autocorrect)
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Wow, you just completely ignored everything we just said, didn't you?
(I was replying to Eito, and asking him a question, because there is a roleplay I am in with one of my alts and he hasn't replied for awhile, and as for earlier, I apologize about hurting your feelings, I don't fully understand the question, it sounded more like an attack to me though, might I ask again, though, but in a nicer way of putting it, what do you mean with said question?)
Firstly, it's called Sarcasm. Look it up.
Secondly, I mean what I said and I say what I mean. Why do you personally think people stop trying to help you after a while?
(Its because I get... really mean towards those who try to help... but I am trying to get better, before I was just sticking with what I was used to, isn't it good that I am working to get better now?)
The Shadow Castle is pretty much dead. Presume that any thread without replies for close to a week is dead, just to be safe. Once more, I implore you to take my advice into consideration. If you have any relevant questions, PM me and I'll answer. That is all.
There's that arrogance again. " Isn't it good that I'm trying to improve? I'm ignoring everyones advise because it's too hard to acknowledge my faults, but I swear I'm definatly trying praise me." Have you never heard that actions are worth 1000 words?
And it is definatly not because your mean. It's because you are incapable change. Remember that other thread you made where a bunch of people tried to help you and you did alomst none of the things they told you to do? That's why people stop helping you. Cause there's no point in trying to help someone who doesn't try and help themselves.
(I am trying to change, I have been saying that,)
Thanks for ignoring the point you can't argue against to say the same thing you haven't proven for the 30th time.